I read the story so far. At the beginning it was very interesting, but now the story is predictable and boring. I will explain: The black pharao get to a new location, convert all women an win every battle. He is an unstoppable force. He is at the point, where every women wanted to be corrupted only by his presence an he have the strongest powers in the dc universe. The heros cant fight him, because every battle is lost in an instant. That facts turns the story in a boring way. Its like a video game, where you have an overpowerd charakter. At first it is very funny to dominate, but its turn very fast boring.
I hope I could explain mi opinion. I also want to appreciate your will to make such an creative project. For that you have my respect.
Hi, thank you so much for your feedback. I’m fully aware of the situation you mentioned, and it’s situation I can’t correct that easily, so let me explain myself, when I started writing Forsaken Souls, it was meant to be a relatively small comic, it was supposed to be finished by now, so the first pages the corruptions were too fast and left to much to be desired, but as I kept writing, the story grew far beyond this initial corruptions, so I was left with an unbalanced story, 4 fourths of the story had more development and the first fourth was rushed. so I started adding some more pages of story and corruptions, and this led to the current situation, what once was a swift takeover over the DCU began dragging more than it should. Now what can you expect on the future? Well in the near future a little more of the same (I need to pass this bump for story sake) and then a lot more story development.
Some mild spoilers ahead.
Next chapter will mostly be about story development but the next one will have more of the same (Sorry about that but I can’t correct that since almost all the chapter is already finished) But from there the story will shift from the master having an unstoppable joyride, to the resistance starting to build up to make a stand, we’ll still see The Master doing his thing, but it will be a lot less than it has been, almost all the rest of the story will be about those gathered by Luthor, but that doesn’t mean the sexy stuff will be over, there’s plenty of that in the chapters to come.
So I can see your point and I share your concern, but I want you to trust me when I tell you theres a lot more to come, we are almost done with this bump, just hang on it there.
Hi, just want to say loving the comic and also I’m hoping the master wins in the end, too many comics are written where the bad guy overpowers everyone to begin with but then the good guys manage to fight back and win, it would be nice to see the bad guys win for a change, good guys always winning gets boring and predictable, just my opinion and hope really, other than that keep up the good work cant wait to get the finished product
Maybe good guys still better to win, because i see this story now the black pharaoh is overpowered like thanos in marvel infinity wars, it will be boring if he win in the end too.
To be fair maybe the good guys win, all woman cure from corruption but the effect(s3x maniac) can’t be cure.. there’s still the black pharaoh in her mind. 😀
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I read the story so far. At the beginning it was very interesting, but now the story is predictable and boring. I will explain: The black pharao get to a new location, convert all women an win every battle. He is an unstoppable force. He is at the point, where every women wanted to be corrupted only by his presence an he have the strongest powers in the dc universe. The heros cant fight him, because every battle is lost in an instant. That facts turns the story in a boring way. Its like a video game, where you have an overpowerd charakter. At first it is very funny to dominate, but its turn very fast boring.
I hope I could explain mi opinion. I also want to appreciate your will to make such an creative project. For that you have my respect.
Hi, thank you so much for your feedback. I’m fully aware of the situation you mentioned, and it’s situation I can’t correct that easily, so let me explain myself, when I started writing Forsaken Souls, it was meant to be a relatively small comic, it was supposed to be finished by now, so the first pages the corruptions were too fast and left to much to be desired, but as I kept writing, the story grew far beyond this initial corruptions, so I was left with an unbalanced story, 4 fourths of the story had more development and the first fourth was rushed. so I started adding some more pages of story and corruptions, and this led to the current situation, what once was a swift takeover over the DCU began dragging more than it should. Now what can you expect on the future? Well in the near future a little more of the same (I need to pass this bump for story sake) and then a lot more story development.
Some mild spoilers ahead.
Next chapter will mostly be about story development but the next one will have more of the same (Sorry about that but I can’t correct that since almost all the chapter is already finished) But from there the story will shift from the master having an unstoppable joyride, to the resistance starting to build up to make a stand, we’ll still see The Master doing his thing, but it will be a lot less than it has been, almost all the rest of the story will be about those gathered by Luthor, but that doesn’t mean the sexy stuff will be over, there’s plenty of that in the chapters to come.
So I can see your point and I share your concern, but I want you to trust me when I tell you theres a lot more to come, we are almost done with this bump, just hang on it there.
Hi, just want to say loving the comic and also I’m hoping the master wins in the end, too many comics are written where the bad guy overpowers everyone to begin with but then the good guys manage to fight back and win, it would be nice to see the bad guys win for a change, good guys always winning gets boring and predictable, just my opinion and hope really, other than that keep up the good work cant wait to get the finished product
Thanks!
Maybe good guys still better to win, because i see this story now the black pharaoh is overpowered like thanos in marvel infinity wars, it will be boring if he win in the end too.
To be fair maybe the good guys win, all woman cure from corruption but the effect(s3x maniac) can’t be cure.. there’s still the black pharaoh in her mind. 😀
How many chapters will come?